It takes more than a syllable count to make a proper haiku. A good haiku should be like a riddle with the first two lines setting up an image that is resolved in the last line. Here’s one I wrote for my wife:
Were they in the sky?
Did I see them in your eyes?
I dreamed I saw stars.
poohbear8192 over 14 years ago
Oh dear, I forgot That pound of gold found beneath Rushing stream, waters.
Now that follows the 5 7 5 = 17 syllables rule.
But rules are meant to be broken. Good Haiku Nicole.
runar over 14 years ago
It takes more than a syllable count to make a proper haiku. A good haiku should be like a riddle with the first two lines setting up an image that is resolved in the last line. Here’s one I wrote for my wife:
Were they in the sky? Did I see them in your eyes? I dreamed I saw stars.
runar over 14 years ago
She said it was the first time anyone had ever written a poem for her. I miss her.
poohbear8192 over 14 years ago
Runar
I like your suggestion. It makes it more difficult to write haiku, but the difficulty forces me to be more conscious of what I’m doing.
Maybe people would learn something about themselves if they tried their hand at haiku.
Your haiku helps me visualize the truth you shared.
Sorry for your loss.
Iwa Iniki over 14 years ago
What kind of Haiku do you expect from a cat, runar?